The Clip: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3IwDHvNxjJo&feature=youtu.be
Sitting in peace,
Enjoying the breeze that surrounds them,
There’s isn’t a worry in their young minds,
Disturbance all of a sudden
The predator slowly approaches its target
Young and inexperienced hearts in danger
The ravenous and treacherous lion approaches
Its eyes fixed on its next meal
Their young lives about to come to an end.
An obstacle a reaches the lion
The fearless mother puts herself in between the lion and her kids
That instinct of the mother
To do anything to protect her children
Her heart beats tremendously fast as the lion approaches her
Yet she does not run away
Giving her kids the time they need.
Her bravery is enough,
The lion goes in search of another meal,
The mother’s love prevails.
Hey there! I like your poem :P
ReplyDeleteIf I had to write a commentary on it, I would focus on...
1. Structure -because the separation of stanzas is such that each addresses a different aspect of the subject, different points in time.
2. Syntax -because incomplete phrases and enjambment creates a rhythm. It also seems to separate ideas and set a tone --fragments create a sense of urgency...
3. Repetition -"hearts", "young". Emphasizes the love/capacity to love and innocence of the babies. Contrasts with the "ravenous and treacherous lion". Nina